Reviews For The Ones They Want.
Name: sekmarc (Signed) · Date: 11/18/2013 12:26 am · For: Part 3
I'm re-reading this story and I noticed that you have a tendency to words kind of fit a situation, though not as well as some others. The one that got me in this chapter is the use of 'lineage' in regards to Dawn claiming the position of third in command of the Council. I think it would have been better if you had used the word 'succession' as in 'Dawn is third in the line of succession' as opposed to saying she was a part of the lineage as that implies bloodlines to me. It might also imply being a part of the Slayer lineage, which there is no evidence to say she is. For future reference, 'succession' just fits better for the context you were using it. Still, I'm enjoying the story just as much as I did the first time. Thanks and Happy Writing!
Name: grey-shadow-horse (Signed) · Date: 08/17/2013 02:29 pm · For: Part 5
I liked it :) the girls were cute.
Author's Response: writing mini slayers is always fun.
Name: cacaliadragon (Signed) · Date: 08/12/2013 03:57 am · For: Part 5
I loved this story. It's great to see how Xander and Coulson maneuvered things to protect the girls. Though I can completely see those two taking over both the Council and Shield. I like how Xander was protective of the girls and how he was working to find people to protect the girls for when something happens to him.
Author's Response: i think they make an interesting pair. and yeah i can see them having to take over to save the world and others.
Name: moontreasurei (Signed) · Date: 07/04/2013 08:14 am · For: Part 5
*feeds The Force and snickers in endless amusement* Loved it!
Author's Response: thank you, Faramir. i'm glad you liked it that much. vo
Name: DennSedai (Signed) · Date: 07/03/2013 07:26 am · For: Part 5
*stares and groans* Noooooooo.... you can't leave us with that kind of evil cliffhanger.
Author's Response: it's not a cliffhanger and things were nicely going right for a change.
if i'm evil...well, i freely admit to that.
Name: DennSedai (Signed) · Date: 07/03/2013 06:09 am · For: Part 3
*cackles* Oh hell, the madness deepens and widens....
Author's Response: yes, and then they meet the kids.
Name: DennSedai (Signed) · Date: 07/03/2013 04:45 am · For: Part 2
*grins* I'm surprised Xander didn't go off worse. Lovely story so far.
Author's Response: thank you. and yeah, xander's living up to his new cohorts a tiny bit. vo
Name: Jirel (Signed) · Date: 07/02/2013 04:50 am · For: Part 1
Thanks so much for coming out with a new story! I was just re-re-re-reading The Writer Series and thought I'd check. Great story!
Author's Response: welcome. you'll have a few more over the next few days.
Name: Wind Wolf (Signed) · Date: 07/02/2013 12:45 am · For: Part 5
A lot of goodness, thank you!!! WW.
Author's Response: you're welcome. i'm glad you liked it. vo
Name: sekmarc (Signed) · Date: 07/01/2013 08:30 pm · For: Part 5
Thank you so much for giving us such a great story! Early even! Not to sound greedy or anything, but does this mean we get to see one of the other stories you were working on as an Independence Day treat?
Author's Response: no, you're getting a part of lineage and the rest of the old ones series. sorry, the others still need more proofreading. but i'm glad you liked this one so much. vo.